First suggestion if at all possible is change the picture - between cowering in the cage and the red demon eyes, she doesn't show to her best advantage.
Maybe try a rewrite something along the lines of:
"Taera is a stunning Siamese mix with dilute torti markings on her creamy colored coat of soft smooth typicaly Siamese fur. Although her coloring is unusual the first thing you may notice about this sweet girl are her bold bright blue eyes.
For a kitty with such remarkable looks Taera is surprising laid back, even shy - not at all what you might expect with a Siamese. Of course the staff who spend time with her report that Taera loves to be pet and/or brushed next to them or in her basket. This approximately one year old princess hasn't found a lap she enjoys here at the shelter, maybe she is waiting for you. Come by the shelter and and see if this lovely girl is the kitty you've been looking for - perhaps she is looking for you?"
cant much tell that I'm a bit of a sap and a salesman - eh? Maybe some of it works maybe not but ime the desperate pleas without the positives dont go as far...
Last edited by Nora B; 07-21-2011 at 11:16 PM.
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